Help with the Last Line, a Short Poem

A good luck story

Amusement Not a meme about Corona. But fun anyway.

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Lol. This is completely not important at all. I just wanted to put it on facebook for my friends! Ahem.

'What a Book Should be' and, 'What's Wrong with me',
I can't allow myself to think about these---

For if I do, I can't write the first 'halloo',
Without wondering, if I'm a bumbling _____

Ha ha, bumbling WHAT? It has to rhyme with 'these', right?
 
cheese (or a rolling cheese)
bees (to make it: 'if I'm bumbling ayes and bees')
tease
wheeze
zombies (bumbling zombies, which would need amendment of the last line: ??)
or last line:
Without bumbling all my wordly responsibilities

I'm sure there are lots to play with.
 
cheese (or a rolling cheese)
bees (to make it: 'if I'm bumbling ayes and bees')
tease
wheeze
zombies (bumbling zombies, which would need amendment of the last line: ??)
or last line:
Without bumbling all my wordly responsibilities

I'm sure there are lots to play with.
I'm liking your effort, but none of these make me sneeze? Fly my kite in a breeze?
 
For if I do, I can't write the first 'halloo',
Without wondering, if I'm a bumbling _____

It's about the metre, the scanning as much as the rhyming. This version for instance has 10 beats per line. Count them on your fingers.

Or I can't even write the first 'halloo',
Without this helluva hullaballoo
 
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A good luck story

Amusement Not a meme about Corona. But fun anyway.

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