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[David Steele]

I love the staccato, frame-jumping style of shifting perspective. .

Thank you for your comments. It's appreciated. I'm not sure about the jumping about, to be honest. I think it might put potential readers off. I'm giving some thought to putting all the back story into chapter three.

 

[Lex Black]

Welcome to the Colony!

 

[Jason Byrne]

Thank you for your comments. It's appreciated. I'm not sure about the jumping about, to be honest. I think it might put potential readers off. I'm giving some thought to putting all the back story into chapter three.

Honestly, I think it works well as it is — it stands on it's own, generates energy and momentum. But what harm was there ever in tinkering, and setting the two versions side-by-side for comparison?

 

[Katie-Ellen]

I liked The Fountain. It was all just him, in the end. He was the conquistaodor, he was the space traveller, but the pain of a last goodbye, is everybody's. The magical's a way of coping. Had me in bits.

 

[Jason Byrne]

I liked The Fountain. It was all just him, in the end. He was the conquistaodor, he was the space traveller, but the pain of a last goodbye, is everybody's. The magical's a way of coping. Had me in bits.

I watched that movie every night, for a while, to get through a really bad time. That and Fight Club. I defy anyone not to cry, watching that movie, no matter how many times they've seen it — the former, that is. Not the latter.

 

[Meerkat]

The blurb is great! I want to read it!

 

[AliG]

Welcome from another fantasy weaver.
Book sounds terrific. Let us know how it rolls- you certainly have sparked some interest here.