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Help! Feedback needed on story title

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I recently wrote a flash piece about a woman who is denying an essential fact about herself even though she has had glimpses about this fact. I am the world's worst with coming up with titles, and I came up with this: "A Hasp, A Latch, A Peephole." The idea is supposed to be that she won't open the door on the fact, but she can almost see that it's out there.

Please, be brutal -- is this too obscure?
 
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Jennifer Stone

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I think as long as it becomes apparent through the story, that title sounds funky.
 

Marc Joan

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Hard to say without reading the story. I certainly like the idea of a title that references a critical element or concept in the story, such that the title becomes auxiliary to the story, rather than being just a label. And it's fine, in my opinion, for said reference to be a little obscure.
That said, I am not sure if I like 'peephole', seems to have mildly distasteful associations? Or is that just me....
 

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BTW, if you want to PM me with the story pasted into the email body, I'd be happy to give an opinion on the title--and feedback on the rest--if you think that would be helpful. Only thing is, it might not happen immediately, as I have to fit writing stuff into sporadic and unpredictable downtime.
 
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Alistair Roberts

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All of the above. Without reading it, it's rather guess work. As for 'peephole', what about "A Hasp, A Latch, A Glimpse" although again, without reading the story, it's rather a shot in the dark ;)
 

Katie-Ellen

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Too much, despite 'The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe'.

I'd say choose one; eg, 'The Latch' , or 'Latched.'
 

James Marinero

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Why not just 'Hasp, Latch, Peephole'?

It did remind me of 'Alice through the Looking Glass'. What's the MCs name? I hesitate to suggest 'Susan through her Peephole' but something along those lines could work.
 
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Meerkat

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Good suggestions, everyone! I think it should definitely be shortened and less obscure.

I like "Pandora's Box," but somehow it doesn't quite work with the story. Maybe a riff on it, however. A lot of times when I try to come up with story titles, I riff off of titles I like.

All of your suggestions are food for thought, thanks!
 
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Meerkat

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BTW, if you want to PM me with the story pasted into the email body, I'd be happy to give an opinion on the title--and feedback on the rest--if you think that would be helpful. Only thing is, it might not happen immediately, as I have to fit writing stuff into sporadic and unpredictable downtime.

I'm still in the process of editing it, but when I am finished, I'll take you up on it!
 
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