Help Please! Feedback needed on story title

[Meerkat]

I recently wrote a flash piece about a woman who is denying an essential fact about herself even though she has had glimpses about this fact. I am the world's worst with coming up with titles, and I came up with this: "A Hasp, A Latch, A Peephole." The idea is supposed to be that she won't open the door on the fact, but she can almost see that it's out there.

Please, be brutal -- is this too obscure?

 

[Jennifer Stone]

I think as long as it becomes apparent through the story, that title sounds funky.

 

[Emurelda]

I like obscure and abstract. It's intriguing.

 

[tabby3]

How about the obvious: Pandora's Box?

 

[Marc Joan]

Hard to say without reading the story. I certainly like the idea of a title that references a critical element or concept in the story, such that the title becomes auxiliary to the story, rather than being just a label. And it's fine, in my opinion, for said reference to be a little obscure.
That said, I am not sure if I like 'peephole', seems to have mildly distasteful associations? Or is that just me....

 

[Marc Joan]

BTW, if you want to PM me with the story pasted into the email body, I'd be happy to give an opinion on the title--and feedback on the rest--if you think that would be helpful. Only thing is, it might not happen immediately, as I have to fit writing stuff into sporadic and unpredictable downtime.

 

[Alistair Roberts]

All of the above. Without reading it, it's rather guess work. As for 'peephole', what about "A Hasp, A Latch, A Glimpse" although again, without reading the story, it's rather a shot in the dark

 

[Katie-Ellen]

Too much, despite 'The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe'.

I'd say choose one; eg, 'The Latch' , or 'Latched.'

 

[James Marinero]

Why not just 'Hasp, Latch, Peephole'?

It did remind me of 'Alice through the Looking Glass'. What's the MCs name? I hesitate to suggest 'Susan through her Peephole' but something along those lines could work.

 

[Meerkat]

Good suggestions, everyone! I think it should definitely be shortened and less obscure.

I like "Pandora's Box," but somehow it doesn't quite work with the story. Maybe a riff on it, however. A lot of times when I try to come up with story titles, I riff off of titles I like.

All of your suggestions are food for thought, thanks!

 

[Meerkat]

BTW, if you want to PM me with the story pasted into the email body, I'd be happy to give an opinion on the title--and feedback on the rest--if you think that would be helpful. Only thing is, it might not happen immediately, as I have to fit writing stuff into sporadic and unpredictable downtime.

I'm still in the process of editing it, but when I am finished, I'll take you up on it!