elevator pitch opinions

[Trey]

A literary agent takes on a client. What better way to stop her blackmailing him? Until he's forced to choose: his secret or his heart.

Oooooh, I love it. And I'll add the spec issue into the blurb too.
Thanks so much @RBurnett @Hannah F @Pamela Jo @Claire G @Eva Ulian and @RK Wallis - this has been so much more than just a poll

 

[TimRees]

Number 1 is the simplest and a pitch has to be immediately clearly understood.

 

[LJ Beck]

A literary agent takes on a client. What better way to stop her blackmailing him? Until he's forced to choose: his secret or his heart.

This is great, Hannah. It doesn't get into those pesky detail questions that can't be answered in a quick pitch. It also, very importantly, sets up a conflict and generates good dramatic questions like, what's she blackmailing him for? What secret? I think it also conveys the blend of genres well, too. Comedy, thriller, and romance.

I was going to suggest trying to generate some hooky questions in the pitch, and hint at the main conflict, which is not easy to do, and Hannah's gone and done it! Well done Hannah!

 

[Pamela Jo]

This is great, Hannah. It doesn't get into those pesky detail questions that can't be answered in a quick pitch. It also, very importantly, sets up a conflict and generates good dramatic questions like, what's she blackmailing him for? What secret? I think it also conveys the blend of genres well, too. Comedy, thriller, and romance.

I was going to suggest trying to generate some hooky questions in the pitch, and hint at the main conflict, which is not easy to do, and Hannah's gone and done it! Well done Hannah!

Exactly my thoughts Lyse. We may have to start hiring Hannah to write our pitches.