What worries me more is 'a big ol' sprawly thing that (in all honesty) I'm none too fond of.' - I've written plenty of stuff that other people weren't fond of, but if there were something I'd written that I myself didn't like, I think I would be looking at a major rewrite.
Well, I'm not fond of it because it's long. I prefer my stories (these days) to be about 20 pp. I'm uncomfortable with its length because I'm unsure of my ability to adequately handle it.
I gave it to Mr Meerkat, who is my first line of defence against a bad story, and he praised it to high heaven and said it had the most potential of anything of mine I've ever written. He thinks it should be expanded into a novella. Hence my despair. I trust his judgment, and he thinks I can do it, but . . .
Anyway, the point was that when my friend said that, I immediately thought of numerous books in which the MC dies -- Mother Night, The End of the Affair, Anna Karenina, Madame Bovary.
My personal artistic feeling toward this bit is that it's necessary for her to die. Funny that V for Vendetta should be mentioned -- that, actually, was the inspiration for the story. That's why I feel she should die -- she needs to be a symbol/martyr.