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Welcome… I’m New Here! Advice on writing someone telling a story

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AmySp

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Hi! I haven't posted in a while but I thought I'd your advice on my WIP. It starts with a journalist going to an artist's house to interview them. During the interview, the artist tells the journalist a story which is the main narrative. The journalist interjects here and there and they have little conversations about the story every now and then but the bulk of it is the story. I'm worried that it will come across a bit too tell rather than show if that makes sense. I've tried to establish the artist's voice but I'm also concerned about dialogue. Will the reader believe that the character remembers dialogue spoken by other characters years ago? Also, when retelling a story of something that happened to you, you tend not to say things like he said and she said. Do you have any advice on how best to approach this and/or examples of books that have done it well? Any suggestions greatly appreciated. :)
 
Most of the ones I can think of that do it well have a bookend at open and close and most of the story is told in the middle as a proper story. Princess Bride is probably one of the best known. Personally, I prefer this style rather than the told (where one person is relaying what happened) even though I know the main story is either backstory or a memory - if it has the same elements of a story (structured with scenes, goal, etc.).
 
Michelle Paver's "Wackenhyrst" (Gothic) is similar: journalist meets the MC for the interview and bookends the novel, but the story is told in between as a proper story.

Patrick Rothfuss "Name of the Wind" (Fantasy) meets the narrator in the bar then recounts his life, but the life is presented to the reader as the story.
 
I'm listening to The Green Mile by Stephen King, narrated wonderfully by Frank Muller, and the story jumps between what happened on the green mile to the same character writing a book in a nursing home. The dialogue is exceptionally natural for a recounting. It's all in the execution, and King makes it look effortless.

Water for Elephants by Sara Gruen did something similar and it was awesome too.
 

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