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Poetry My Father's Painting

The World Between the Words
My Father's Painting.jpg

The groan of the third step

Foretells our appearance

-pyjama-ed-

At the dining room door.


On the table, a blank canvas waits;

double dipper fixed to the dark wood palette,

filled with the smells that lured us down:

linseed oil and white spirits.


We’re here for the magic,

A masterpiece conjured from thin air,

And we plead: Just five minutes.

We won’t talk. Promise.



My mother, tutting, finds a discarded

Cardigan and jumper on a chair

And tells us to Put those on

Or you’ll catch your death of cold.



Charcoal is scratching a horizon,

A rough placement of river and trees.

And we’re inhaling

the mellow-sweet pipe puffs.


A methodical scraping and smearing

of titanium white and cobalt, a dash

of yellow ochre and more blue. Palette knife

scraping and smearing the perfect hue.


A plate of toast is put before us

And we’re told to Eat, then bed

As my father butters the canvas with paint

that metamorphoses into sky, clouds, reflected water.


We nibble slowly.


In the kitchen, a Christmas cake is being made,

And we stay silent, hoping no sound will be a reminder

we’re here; as mucky fields and hedgerows,

trees like stretching spider veins appear.


Not nearly finished; there are no fence posts

or gates or brown and white cattle drinking

by the water’s edge yet.

But our time is up.


Warm cinnamon and allspice accompany us

as we slide between cold sheets, grumbling.

While downstairs, my mother prepares for tomorrow

and my father, at the table, completes the painting into life.
 
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Em: i love the warm, homey excitement and smells of this poem. You've captured the magic of sacred time, father painting (in this case, perhaps other grown up activities for many of us). Wonderful. My only critique is that after the first use of "Mother" and "Father" I think the continued use becomes a distraction from the warmth and magic that is the painting, taking shape in parallel with the motherly ministrations. It is obvious (and a bit fun) who is doing what: i.e. "eat then bed" and "butters the canvas" (a line I love!).

Mostly, however, I love the parallel of the magic of painting with the quotidian tenderness of mom. Nice
 
@Hannah F , thank you :heart: That image is one of my dad's paintings :)

My only critique is that after the first use of "Mother" and "Father"

@dave.crowther , thank you, I dithered over that, going back and forwards, taking them out and putting them back in :) but I think you are right. I made an audio recording of both and I do think I actually prefer it without (prefer without *today*. I'll reassess tomorrow, lol). I'll edit now, methinks.
 
This is simply beautiful, Emily. Evocative with its multi-sensory visuals. A clear narrative. You have managed to evoke in words the atmosphere of your dad’s finished (and gorgeous) painting. I love it.
 
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The groan of the third step

Foretells our appearance

-pyjama-ed-

At the dining room door.


On the table, a blank canvas waits;

double dipper fixed to the dark wood palette,

filled with the smells that lured us down:

linseed oil and white spirits.


We’re here for the magic,

A masterpiece conjured from thin air,

And we plead: Just five minutes.

We won’t talk. Promise.



My mother, tutting, finds a discarded

Cardigan and jumper on a chair

And tells us to Put those on

Or you’ll catch your death of cold.



Charcoal is scratching a horizon,

A rough placement of river and trees.

And we’re inhaling

the mellow-sweet pipe puffs.


A methodical scraping and smearing

of titanium white and cobalt, a dash

of yellow ochre and more blue. Palette knife

scraping and smearing the perfect hue.


A plate of toast is put before us

And we’re told to Eat, then bed

As my father butters the canvas with paint

that metamorphoses into sky, clouds, reflected water.


We nibble slowly.


In the kitchen, a Christmas cake is being made,

And we stay silent, hoping no sound will be a reminder

we’re here; as mucky fields and hedgerows,

trees like stretching spider veins appear.


Not nearly finished; there are no fence posts

or gates or brown and white cattle drinking

by the water’s edge yet.

But our time is up.


Warm cinnamon and allspice accompany us

as we slide between cold sheets, grumbling.

While downstairs, my mother prepares for tomorrow

and my father, at the table, completes the painting into life.
Gorgeous poem
 
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