Thrillers! | Pop-Up Submissions LIVE Sunday 31st July

[AgentPete]

On today's Pop-Ups Submissions…

• Starfish - Adventure/Thriller by Ryan Pote;
• Behind The MIrror - Commerical thriller by Sharon Feinstein;
• The Hawk Wasp - Psychological Thriller by Rob Duffy;
• Sasha's Not Here! - psychological thriller by S.E. Stenner;
• Prey - Psychological Thriller by Doc Varga.

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Featuring special guest and
founder of the radically-new book discovery site Shepherd.com… Ben Fox!
Plus our very own Kaylie Finn!
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Check out Ben Fox's website: Shepherd.com


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[Rob Duffy]

Thank you so much for having my submission on the show. I'm looking forward to some great feedback to help improve my writing

 

[Rob Duffy]

A further massive thank you to everyone who made comments on my submission today - I feel I have learnt an awful lot in a very short space of time which is great. I'm especially grateful @AgentPete for the extra detail you provided at the end, thank you.

A bit baffled where 'licked' or 'dog' came into the reviewers thoughts, but hey, if the story had gripped I'm sure that wouldn't have happened!

Cheers

Rob

 

[AgentPete]

@Rob Duffy Yes, that was an interesting reaction… I didn’t see the “dog” possibility myself, but the GR did, and they’re never wrong It’s possible that by directing our attention to the fox initially, and its reaction to your protag, you’re focussing the reader on the animal-animal nature of the encounter. Subtle stuff.

It’s a hoary old trope, of course, to reveal that your narrator is a canine! I suspect the GR didn’t want to be caught out like that. Also, we’ve had combo human-animal detectives on the show once or twice, so maybe they were alert to that possibility, too.

Stick around, Rob, you’ll find the Colony can help you a lot.

 

[Rob Duffy]

@Rob Duffy Yes, that was an interesting reaction… I didn’t see the “dog” possibility myself, but the GR did, and they’re never wrong It’s possible that by directing our attention to the fox initially, and its reaction to your protag, you’re focussing the reader on the animal-animal nature of the encounter. Subtle stuff.

It’s a hoary old trope, of course, to reveal that your narrator is a canine! I suspect the GR didn’t want to be caught out like that. Also, we’ve had combo human-animal detectives on the show once or twice, so maybe they were alert to that possibility, too.

Stick around, Rob, you’ll find the Colony can help you a lot.

Thanks again Pete, I think I will...