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AgentPete

Capo Famiglia
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Final show of the series before our late summer break; we're back on Sunday 23rd September! On this show, there's historical fiction from Douglas, a thriller from Geoff, crime/thriller from Edward, a musical thriller from Robert and adult humour from David. Plus word games galore!
 
Thanks to AgentPete, AliG, Katie-Ellen and everyone in the chat room for your comments on my untitled submission this evening. A special thanks to Rich for reading it so well. If anyone is interested, the whole of the first chapter is currently available to view on wattpad. Type A NIGHT OUT IN WHITECHAPEL - davidweller06 - Wattpad into the Google search engine and the correct link will appear. Please let me know what you think.
 
I thought it was quite tele-visual, Edward. I could just see it on a screen, and thought it was well on its way, just less would have been more in the opening chapter. I rather liked the Latin inscription God Protects, I'm guessing that was a bit of foreshadowing going on there, and God's going to have up his game pretty soon on the protecting front. I look forward to learning more.

My spouse is from Dover...and everywhere. Army brat born 53.
 
I did have a second first chapter so maybe I should have submitted that instead. :) Being new to this, what is a cowbell?
 
It means more oomph needed. In this context is means the writing needs to rack up the punch a few notches, and the hook needs to be stronger. Passion with control. It's a reference to a famous Christopher Walken skit that became a wider running joke.

 
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